Wednesday, November 9, 2016

My Writing!

Talofa, welcome back to my blog. Today I am going to to blog my blogging about my writing. I am very proud of my writing. This my first Essay! It is an compare and contrast essay about Great White Shark and hammerhead Shark

Great White Shark And Hammerhead Shark

Essay Success Criteria
  • Uses scientific vocabulary
  • Revised and edited
  • Accurate paragraphs with subheadings
  • Essay structure followed
  • No personal pronouns
  • Factual
  • Detailed ideas
  • Sentences- different lengths and beginnings

Great White Shark and Hammerhead Sharks are both similar and fierce animals, but have a mass of differences, especially with having very unique ways of hunting and giant differences in size.


Both these sharks are powerful eaters.  These carnivorous creatures enjoy sharks and other fish (including Rays, Tuna and Dolphin).  They are also known to eat very large creatures, some which the great white doesn't even digest.

These sharks also live in the same areas.  Mainly around land, in oceans around Australia, South Africa, USA, Asia and even New Zealand they might meet each other.  But Hammerhead’s like to hang around the bottom of the ocean, where great whites prefer to live round the top.

Both these creatures are fish but they don’t lay eggs! Unlike other fish sharks give birth to live young, but are still cold blooded which makes them fish.   They also live under water so they don’t breath air like us. Instead they breathe oxygen by splashing water over their gills.


Great White Sharks
These enormous creatures are in fact the biggest sharks alive.  Surprisingly these sharks can grow up to 20 ft long and can weigh up to 1,950 kg ( just under 2 ton).  With a lifespan of about 70 years or more,  which is well above older scientific estimates.

Great White Sharks have an interesting way of hunting.  Using their spiky teeth to their advantage, they bite their prey and wait for them to bleed to death.  Their bite force is about 18,216 newton’s, big enough to withstand the forces required to eat larger prey.

Great whites are known to frighten people. They may have giant teeth but don’t be alarmed - they’re not human hunters.  A great pointed dorsal fin sticks out the top; this a bluey-gray colour. Their pointy head and 10 gills make them very fierce fish.

Hammerhead Shark
These magnificent sharks are known for their hammer shaped head.  Ranging from 3 - 19.7 ft, they can weigh between 3 - 580 kg.  They’re gray with a greenish tint, this allows them to blend in with the sea.

Hammerheads like to prey on squid, octopus and stingray (their favourite).  Great white sharks are predators, eating them and their young!  These are also not human hunters!  They stick around the bottom stalking their prey in schools.

The head is useful, believe it or not! Hammerheads use their head for hunting their prey.  They like to pin down the stingrays and eat it when it’s weak and in shock.    

There are different species of hammerhead sharks (Whitefin hammerhead, scoophead, wing head and  smooth hammerhead).  But sadly some are becoming endangered.  The great hammerhead and scalloped hammerhead are endangered species for many reasons; one being because of pollution destroying their habitat.


Great White Sharks and Hammerhead Sharks are both scary shark eating animals.  They have their similarities and differences especially in their ways of hunting.

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  1. Well done Bella, it was really interesting and I really enjoyed the two animals because I like sharks!

  2. First of all, WOW! I can tell that you put heaps of effort into this writing. I found it very interesting. Also I got hooked in and all your facts were really interesting.
    Keep up the great writing:)

  3. WOW what an outstanding essay Bella. I can see you have worked extremely hard to get this essay dione. I can also see that you did not rush this essay and you have done extremely well. I was really interested in your essay because I am not a shark lover but by reading your essay it makes me want to read some more. I can see that one day you will become an amazing writer.
    Keep up the great work :)